A poem I promised

[alpharaposa]

For that_guy_zach ages ago..

Constantinople

We built this city
On eternity's blueprint;
An edifice of forever,
A monument to God,

But we live in time.
Time ate the stones;
It drank our health;
It stole our strength.

The city was of the world;
The world laid it low.
We wept at what was wrought.

All worldly things pass away.
We who mourned mere moonlight
Will inherit the sun.

Comments

[eric-hinkle.livejournal.com]

Very well done; you don't see a lot of poetry devoted to the city of Constantinople.

[stryck.livejournal.com]

Thank you. He requested a poem specifically about the fall of Constantinople, which made it a bit more of a challenge.

[eric-hinkle.livejournal.com]

I'd say that subject would almost require an old-fashioned epic, "The Death of the Last Emperor of Rome".

[stryck.livejournal.com]

I'm not very good at producing epics.

[eric-hinkle.livejournal.com]

Sorry, I didn't intend any criticism of what you've done. It's a great poem.

[stryck.livejournal.com]

None taken. :) I guess my comment looked a bit abrupt, but I can blame that on the difficulty of typing while holding the cub.

I do have problems writing long poems, though. They're difficult for me.

[eric-hinkle.livejournal.com]

Well, holding the cub is more important that responding to random comments on LJ. But thanks for the response & good luck with any future poems.

[zeeth_kyrah]

Well done.

[that-guy-zach.livejournal.com]

Bravo! Very well done!